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It is now possible for scientists and tourist to travel to remote natural environment, such as south pole. Do advantage this development outweigh the disadvantage

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Travelling to the most untouched places can be possible now. Presently, many scientific
experters
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experts
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 and holiday-makers visiting
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 areas. In my opinion, even though
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 trend has some demerits,
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the positives
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 are more significant.
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visiting a geographical area
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 was isolated for many years can be exciting for researchers since they can learn some information from
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. They could able to study how the flora and fauna are different from other species of the world and what adaptations make them survive in that particular environment.
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the life
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 of the polar bear is so crucial
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 the medical point of view as its physical features make them unique creature on the land.
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, these kinds of travel experiments would give an insight
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 of pre-historians and their struggles.
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holiday-makers, can experience a whole new world of amusement which is entirely novel to their previous visits. Due to globalization, people are well-aware of famous tourist spots both by touring or watching vlogs.
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, remote places are rarely explored by regular travellers so available information on the internet is extremely minimum. Despite the advantages mentioned above, there are some drawbacks
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 be seen as well.
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 of
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 places can harm the natural environment and lead extinction of natural resources.
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Since
 the government and authorities are highly aware of these kinds of problems, necessary actions could be taken before allowing research and tourism.
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, damages to the
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ecosystem
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 rarely occur. In conclusion, visiting
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a geographically
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 isolated environment can bring
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best experience to both
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tourists and researchers. In my opinion,
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 can bring more benefits than any problem.
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