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Recently, abortion increases rapidly and becomes a controversial topic. Some people suppose that abortion should be legal while others are against it. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

#abortion #increases #topic #people
Recently
abortion
 cases have been seen on the rise in our society. As it is an issue of utmost attention, merely neglecting it would not solve the crisis.
Abortion
 has been seen as a
henious
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heinous
 crime and
as a result
, the victim party has to suffer a lot mentally and physically through it. As an aftermath result, people face traumatic responses from our society, often resulting in
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suicides. Though some opine that
abortion
 should be illegalized amidst
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 in its cases.
View point
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Viewpoint
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 presented in the favour of aforementioned idea is that illegalizing
abortion
 would let people
to
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be conscious and vigorous in following safety measures.
Also
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 it will enable them to avoid any legal punishment which they might face in the
occurence
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occurrence
 of
such
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.
In contrast
,Those who staunchly support
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 of legalizing
abortion
 stance their narrative that a person should be given
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complete freedom on their own decisions. As making decisions is the fundamental right of every human being,
hence
 no one should be deprived of it. People should make and bear their own choices no matter what the end results are. In the light of
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 viewpoints, I strongly nod with the suggestion of legalizing
abortion
. Not only should it be allowed, but
also
 respected as a decision of the person. In
USA
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,
abortion
 has been legal for many years. The reason
abortion
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 been given
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legal status is explained as a gesture of respect to the choices its citizens take; no matter what the consequences take place aftermath.
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