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The tendency of human being to copy one another is shown in the popularity of fashion clothes and consumer goods. To what extent do you agree?

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Imitation is a quality
which
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 is possessed by the majority of the living organisms in the animal kingdom. It is often believed that
this
 characteristic makes
people
 follow trendy dressing styles and buy various
products
 in the markets. I completely disagree with
this
 statement because
people
wants
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 to live
comfortable
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a comfortable
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 life
that is
reason
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the reason
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 why most of us going back
of
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 modern and branded items.
To begin
 with,
people
 tend to purchase fashionable
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clothes
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cloths
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clothes
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 and modern gadgets because these materials provide better quality and comfort to their life.
In other words
,
by
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wearing designer sarees or using most modern mobile phones boosts our confidence as well as enhances our productivity
into
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the
next
 level.
Similarly
,
many
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 latest
house-hold
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household
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 equipment can reduce our
work-load
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 and the extra time can be utilized for some productive activities.
Therefore
, consumers buying popular items to save their time rather than blindly follow others fashion concept. There are some customers
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purchase many
products
 to imitate either their friends or family members. They may buy
products
 and services which may not be required at all. Even though they tend to follow their ideal to
extent
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, later on, possibly, they
tend
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 realize the grave consequence of their actions. Copying of something may not be long lasting since it costs huge and rarely
afford
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 by all. Due to
this
 reason, I strongly believe copying is not the real cause of
popularity
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the popularity
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 of fashionable dresses and
products
. In conclusion, even though it is sometimes thought that imitation is the reason behind why many items are so famous in the market, I totally opposing
this
 idea. Usability and comfort are the two factors
which
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makes
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people
 buy goods and services.
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