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As a result of tourism and the increasing number of people travelling, there is a growing demand for more flights. What problems does this have on the environment? What measures could be taken to solve the problems?

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There is a growing demand for more flights because of the development of tourism and an increase in the
number
 of
travelers
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travellers
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. Despite the fact that there have been serious problems
as a result
, there are solutions.
First
 and foremost,
this
 can lead to air pollution. It increases the percentage of carbon dioxide in the air, which significantly reduces oxygen. An increase in the percentage of carbon dioxide leads to the destruction of the ozone layer, which will take many years to recover. The
second
 problem will be the reduction of airfare, as well as lower prices for travel agents.
This
 will lead to a slow decline in the economic condition of the country.
Also
, because of the increase in the
number
 of tourists, it will be necessary to build a new airport. For the construction will be taken a huge amount of land (km). There are many solutions
for
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this
 problem.
First
, it is necessary to make people aware of the consequences of constant air travel.
This
 could help reduce the
number
 of
travelers
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travellers
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 by at least 10%.
Also
, you can raise the price of airline tickets, thereby reducing the use of
airplanes
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.
In addition
, to encourage people to travel in an environmentally friendly way. In conclusion, increasing the
number
 of flights could lead to a serious problem for people. Measures must be taken in time to avoid the consequences.
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