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As a result of tourism and the increasing number of people travelling, there is a growing demand for more flights. What problems does this have on the environment? What measures could be taken to solve the problems?

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Tourism
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main
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 factor
of
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 developing the transport infrastructure. The government is building a lot of
airport
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 to upgrade the
tourism
 level in the country.
However
, the impact of
plane
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the plane
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 using
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 ecology is colossal.
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 for that issue.
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 that planes, increase the pollution in the environment. It is enormous problem and it needs a serious
solution
. Many people use
such
 services to explore
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new places
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 because it is saving
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time and comfortable. People, who living near airport suffer by pollution from carbon dioxide, which
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 produced by
plane
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the plane
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 engine. The temperature of
earth
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if
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 growing every year. The
recently
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 research
shown
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 that the temperature of Earth rose to 5-6-degree Cesium. It has
significant
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 negative impact
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the
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nature’s future. To solve
this
 problem,
authority
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 should increase the taxes and cost of tickets and fuel.
This
solution
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atmosphere
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the atmosphere
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.
Plane
do
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 not have another kind of fuel. They cannot consume hydrogen or
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 gas, which do not have
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negative remains,
such
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other hand
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,
this
solution
 will decrease the
tourism
 level in the country and it would have impacted negatively
to
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 the economy.
However
, is the only
one
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solution
of
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 the issue – increase the cost of tickets.
Tourism
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main
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 part of
economy
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;
however
, it impacts dramatically to the environment.
Plane
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 is
significant
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 kind of transport, which destroy the atmosphere. The government is building a lot of
airport
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 to upgrade the
tourism
 level in the country, but it cost is our health.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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