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As a result of tourism and the increasing number of people travelling, there is a growing demand for more flights. What problems does this have on the environment? What measures could be taken to solve the problems?

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Nowadays, there are many
people
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 who like to travel by different vehicles. The rising amount of
travelers
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 is the cause of
increasing
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the increasing
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 number of journeys by plane.
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 essay will discuss problems
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 can appear because of
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 problem and methods of solving
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. There are many places
have
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 appeared which really attract
people
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. Individuals want to see everything in the world, so they try
travel
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 as much as they can. Unfortunately, ecology is being hurt by fuel in
airplanes
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aeroplanes
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, the dangerous gases from burned petrol poison all organisms and destroy ecology at all.
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However
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 statistic shows that 70%
percent
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 of all
people
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 who like go on a trip by planes do not think about
affects
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 which can bring flights.
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 one of the methods to solve
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 problem is to explain the harm of
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this
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 trips. If
people
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 had known about
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 influence, there would not have been
environment
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environmental
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 problems. Nowadays, all citizens keen on to travel to anywhere. They share
with
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apply
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photos and videos
in
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on
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 social
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media
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medias
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media
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 like “
facebook
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”
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. Others see their jubilant emotions and wish to go to
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 place too.
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 type of advertisement attracts person, so there is
solution
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the solution
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 was invented, and that
people
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 ought to take
trip
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a trip
the trip
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 by online. Digital technologies can provide almost a real picture of a place, if
cheap
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the cheap
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 method of travelling is presented, consumers to
airplane
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aeroplane
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 tickets will decrease, while demand to VR technology. To sum up all arguments above, I am comprehensively convinced that
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 problem really dangerous for
environment
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the environment
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 and it can be solved
by
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in
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 simple ways.
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