Global warming is one of the biggest threats humans face in the 21st Century, and sea levels are continuing to rise at alarming rates. What problems are associated with this and what are some possible solutions.

The
rise
in global temperature is among the greatest dangers human face in
this
century, and ocean levels keep increasing dramatically.
This
essay will discuss the problems associated with
this
phenomenon and suggest some feasible solutions to them. The main problem caused by climate change is the
rise
of ocean
level
and ice melting.
First
, the
rise
in ocean
level
will
caused
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the loss of land. As land
being
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lost,
humanshuman
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humans human
human-human
will soon become homeless and unemployed. Predictably,
a
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mass migration to other countries will happen and the economy of the country will go down seriously and rapidly for sure.
Furthermore
, it can engulf many coastal cities around the world since the
rise
of sea
level
will create frequent floods. Ice melting will cause droughts because there will be
lack
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of water and less rain than before. There
are
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number
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a number
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of possible solutions to these problems,
for example
,
reducingreduce
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reducing reduce
the amount of pollution we discharge into the environment
everyday
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and
to create
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dams around coastal cities which usually suffered from floods and. The less amount of carbon footprint a person create
everyday
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, the
less
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fewer
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negative effects created and discharged into the environment. More specifically, we shouldn’t
use
transportations
such
as cars or motorbikes,...
Instead
, we should
use
public transports or bikes to reduce the
amount
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of fumes.We should
also
use
renewable or alternative sources of energy;
for example
; solar, wind or thermal energy,
....
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To sum up, climate change is still a great challenge humanity faces since it causes many problems directly affect people’s
lifes
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lives
such
as ice melting and the
rise
of sea
level
but feasible solutions are being underway like building dams to stop
flood
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and
to
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use
more environmentally friendly sources of energy.
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