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These days in many countries fewer and fewer people want to become teachers, particularly in secondary schools. What are the reasons for this, and how could the problem be solved?

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In recent years, the number of individuals choosing to teach as a career option is dwindling, and specifically for teaching at secondary schools in most of the countries.
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 development which includes
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 working hours and unacceptable
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 of students.
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, it will suggest solutions to these problems that are reducing
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 spent on the job as well as regulating student's
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 towards teachers. One of the foremost
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 which dissuades people from opting for teaching is that they are expected to spend more
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 working in comparison to any other nine-to-five jobs. Most of the
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, professors are expected to work for 10-12 hours a day, though payment for working overtime is not provided;
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 prevents them from spending
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 with family. As a matter of fact, in an interview conducted by BBC media, a secondary school educator stated that she seldom gets
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 to spend with her family, as by the
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 she arrives home from work her children and spouse would go to sleep. Another reason is that most of the pupils behave insolently with their teachers while mocking the latter's teaching style and causing
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 in the class.
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 problem could be solved by setting flexible working hours.
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, the amount of
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 expend by the faculty members should be minimized, for it will ensure retaining experienced as well as prospective teachers.
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, it will spare them sufficient
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 to carry out various activities apart from work. Another way to tackle
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 problem is by laying stricter rules to maintain the decorum of the school.
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, if any pupil is witnessed treating their lecturer with derision, they should be penalized or subjected to dire consequences,
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 as suspension. In conclusion, even though a number of literates are not showing interest in jobs related to teaching especially to 11-17 aged children due to the elaborate office durations and the way students behave,
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 required and by setting regulations to manage inappropriate conduct of learners.
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