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In recent years, many small local shops have closed because customers travel to large shopping centres or malls to do their shopping. Is this a positive or negative development?

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As long as the customers going the large shopping malls
instead
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 of the small local
shops
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, I believe it is a negative development for the local. It can cause two different problems: decreasing job amount and inconvenience to
people
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 who do not have a vehicle.
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, lots of small local
shops
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 will be closed when
people
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 start shopping in large shopping malls,
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 the only choice that the shop owners will have is to dismiss their employees since they can not afford their salaries. It can be tough for unemployed
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 to find a new job in a short period of time since the market usually does not have that many job positions. Eventually, an increase in the unemployment rate will happen, and it will damage the local economies. On the other aspect, the
people
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 who do not have a vehicle will fall into an inconvenient situation when there are no small local
shops
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 near their lives. Because they do not have to place to shop around the place they lived. They will have to take a bus or other transportation to go to the large shopping mall,
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 they can buy stuff, and it will lead us to really jammed traffic when those
people
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 are going out shopping.
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, it will cost the government a lot of money to expand traffic facilities and slow down the local development. In conclusion, I believe it will be a negative development if small local
shops
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 get closed because
people
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 go to the large shopping centres to do their shopping.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • retail outlets
  • consumer behavior
  • shop locally
  • convenience
  • variety
  • economic growth
  • job creation
  • community
  • personal touch
  • small businesses
  • local economy
  • big corporations
  • dependence
  • shopping habits
  • urbanization
  • globalization
  • competition
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