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Nowadays people have house problems, how they can solve it?

#people #house
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The bar chart given illustrates how many residences were made per
year
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 from 2000 to 2009 in
Derby
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 and
Nottingham
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. Overall, it is clear that
although
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 most of the time more
houses
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 were built in
Derby
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 than
Nottingham
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, on a few occasions more
houses
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 were made in
Nottingham
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.
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, two times,
houses
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 in
Nottingham
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 city were as low as negligible. To describe, in 2000 and 2001, new
houses
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 in both the cities were almost equal, with around 50, but fewer
houses
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 in
Derby
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 than in
Nottingham
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. In 2002, the trend was reversed and
in former
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informer
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 ,city
houses
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 were made around 80, while in latter these were only one forth, about 20.
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year
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, in 2003, the trend was the same. Suddenly, in 2006, the number of residences in
Nottingham
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 fell sharply, with only less than 5
houses
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. In the
year
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 2008, dramatic changes happened and more than 275
houses
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 were constructed in
Derby
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, which were huge in number in comparison to constructions in
Nottingham
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 which had only nearly 5
houses
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. In the
year
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 2009, most of the
houses
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 were made by both cities, with just less than 350 in
derby
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 and 250 in
Nottingham
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.
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