in some countries, owning a home rather than renting one is very important for people. why might this be the case? Do you think this is a positive or negative situation?

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nowadays, most
people
prefer to have a
home
instead
of renting a
home
, and
this
has become one of the most important needs of families. I believe, there are some reasons for
this
, and I think it would be a positive situation for
people
. In many undeveloped countries, the
price
of essential needs
are
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rising which have caused many
problem
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for individuals. Accommodation is one
the
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important needs of human, and they must be worried about the
price
of homes. Because the salary of most
people
saw an eligible growth compared to the growth of
price
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of homes.
Therefore
, if
people
buy a proper
home
, they will survive of financial recession, and the
price
of their
home
will increase if
financial
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recession
occur
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in the future. so, we can consider
this
situation as a long-term investment. In my opinion, owning
home
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a home
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would be positive for
people
compared to renting one.
Firstly
, with buying
home
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,
people
can save their money
instead
of spending their salary on a month-to-month lease. So, they can invest
this
money
on
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other parts like buying stocks.
Secondly
, individuals would not
to
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be worried
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for
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searching
new
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home
when their contract is over with the owner of
home
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the home
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. Finding
new
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a new
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home
and moving the furniture to
new
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a new
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place is an overwhelming process for everybody.
As a result
, staying
on
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a fixed place provides convenience for
people
. in conclusion, I believe owning a
home
would be
positive
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a positive
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condition for us
,
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if we consider it as
investment
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an investment
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and living there for a long time.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • ownership
  • renting
  • importance
  • sense of security
  • stability
  • financial investment
  • asset
  • customize
  • decorate
  • belonging
  • community
  • potential
  • future generations
  • long-term
  • cost advantage
  • control
  • living space
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