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Some people think that it is better to educate boys and girls in separate schools. Others , however believe that boys and girls benefit more from attending mixed schools. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

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Education
 has become a valuable entity for
development
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 of the children not only for shaping their future but
also
 for understanding moral and social responsibilities as well as attaining
sense
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 of communication and brotherhood. It is argued that
,
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co-
education
schools
 for boys and girls have advantages
than
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the
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separate
schools
. As the overall growth of children can be observed from mixed
education
, I strongly support mixed
education
.
However
, I will discuss both
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views in upcoming paragraphs.
To begin
 with,
first
 and foremost,
important
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 gain from
co-
education
 is the development of harmony between male and female through companionships. The children have to complete many projects including science and social, where they need partner, and in
mixed
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 school, they bound to get
partner
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a partner
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 of opposite sex
therefore
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, eventually everyone learns how to work as a team without being
gender biased
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. The recent article in The Times of India on 8th
march
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, on
occasion
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 of women’s day stated that 68% of men who supports their women colleague were studied from
co-
education
schools
.
Moreover
, the crime rate against women has become lower as both sexes understand each other by growing and learning together. The studies conducted by Cambridge University in 2019 reported that 70%
men
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 arrested under rape and sexual harassment charges when traced for their educational status, reflected that they belonged to separate school.
Hence
co-
education
 has immense benefits for
the
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society.
On the contrary
, while learning together many girls faced humiliation and insults by their boys’ colleagues. Especially in developing and traditional culture-oriented countries like Pakistan, Saudi
Arab
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Arabia
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 it is extremely hazardous for females to sit and learn with males, on top of
that is
 absolutely not acceptable in their culture and mythology. So, in these
situations
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 it can become harmful for girls to get educated in mixed
schools
.
For instance
, there was a documentary on television, based on
real
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the real
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 situation in
Taliban
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the Taliban
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 which was an eye-opener for
rest
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the rest
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 of the world. With due respect to the ancient cultures, in
this
 modern
era
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 one must think in terms of safety, women empowerment as well as community enrichment. To attain
this
,
co-
education
 becomes
vital
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 part of the learning system. To exemplify, the 1st woman Prime Minister of Pakistan
Mrs.
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 Benazir Bhutto set an ideal example for the developing countries by her successful work in the field of upliftment of the nation. To conclude, as the advantages of mixed
education
 are clearly greater than the separate
schools
 in order attain total upliftment of both sexes, I strongly support that
education
 must be done in
co-
education
 system of
schools
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • co-education
  • gender segregation
  • peer pressure
  • academic performance
  • gender stereotypes
  • discrimination
  • social skills
  • teamwork
  • collaboration
  • diversity
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