Some people think that it is better to educate boys and girls in separate schools. Others , however believe that boys and girls benefit more from attending mixed schools. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

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Education
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has become a valuable entity for
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of the children not only for shaping their future but
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for understanding moral and social responsibilities as well as attaining
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of communication and brotherhood. It is argued that
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education
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schools
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for boys and girls have advantages
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separate
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. As the overall growth of children can be observed from mixed
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, I strongly support mixed
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, I will discuss both
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views in upcoming paragraphs.
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and foremost,
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gain from
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education
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is the development of harmony between male and female through companionships. The children have to complete many projects including science and social, where they need partner, and in
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school, they bound to get
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of opposite sex
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, eventually everyone learns how to work as a team without being
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. The recent article in The Times of India on 8th
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, on
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of women’s day stated that 68% of men who supports their women colleague were studied from
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education
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schools
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, the crime rate against women has become lower as both sexes understand each other by growing and learning together. The studies conducted by Cambridge University in 2019 reported that 70%
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arrested under rape and sexual harassment charges when traced for their educational status, reflected that they belonged to separate school.
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education
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has immense benefits for
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society.
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, while learning together many girls faced humiliation and insults by their boys’ colleagues. Especially in developing and traditional culture-oriented countries like Pakistan, Saudi
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it is extremely hazardous for females to sit and learn with males, on top of
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absolutely not acceptable in their culture and mythology. So, in these
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it can become harmful for girls to get educated in mixed
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, there was a documentary on television, based on
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situation in
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which was an eye-opener for
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of the world. With due respect to the ancient cultures, in
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modern
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one must think in terms of safety, women empowerment as well as community enrichment. To attain
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education
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becomes
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part of the learning system. To exemplify, the 1st woman Prime Minister of Pakistan
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Benazir Bhutto set an ideal example for the developing countries by her successful work in the field of upliftment of the nation. To conclude, as the advantages of mixed
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are clearly greater than the separate
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in order attain total upliftment of both sexes, I strongly support that
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must be done in
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education
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system of
schools
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • co-education
  • gender segregation
  • peer pressure
  • academic performance
  • gender stereotypes
  • discrimination
  • social skills
  • teamwork
  • collaboration
  • diversity
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