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Some people say that protecting the environment is the government’s responsibility. Others believe that every individual should be responsible for it. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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People
 hold different views about whether the government should shoulder the duty of protecting the environment or each person is responsible.
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 time.
However
, from my standpoint, it will be more beneficial if both the country’s authorities and individuals bear the responsibility. On the one hand, public agencies may apply a pivotal role in maintaining the legal framework for
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environmental protection. The legislation must be in place to regulate any sectors including
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,
otherwise
,
people
 will have nothing to obey. Many
people
 would be happy to follow rules and regulations
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imposed by the government thereby taking care of their surroundings. As an example, carbon emission done by motor vehicles can only be prevented if
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 is there, if not, no ways that citizen would stop it.
On the other hand
, it is the obligation of
people
 to obey the rules imposed by the administration for the sake of the environment. The state alone cannot conserve it but a collective effort of the community can do so.
For instance
, if members of the community simply sort out their garbage when
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 them, as per the local authorities’ regulations, much of the damage done can be reduced. To conclude,
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 responsibility of conserving
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nature and its elements is vital. The government and individuals in the society should take care of the environment, but should not compromise their responsibility.
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