the plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today

the maps illustrate how
the
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grace
park
changed from 1920 the time when it opened until now. Overall,the
park
saw a significant development in facilities,
also
, many constructions have been removed. In 1920, there was three rose garden,one of them was located in the north of the
park
,which is replaced by a cafe .there was a stage for musicians in the west of the
park
, which is replaced by amphitheatre for concerts. A fountain was located in the centre of the
park
that is
eliminated,and another rose garden is located
instead
of that fountain.
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constructed around that rose garden. There is a children's play area
next
to the cafe,which is replaced by to pond for water plants.
Finally
,there was a glasshouse in the southeast of the
park
, which is replaced by a water fountain
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