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Although more and more people read news on the Internet, newspapers will remain the most important source of news. Do you agree or disagree?

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Some people are of the opinion that despite the meteoric rise of the
news
 on the Internet, newspapers still play a crucial role in our life. Personally, I am in total disagreement about
this
 idea due to many drawbacks of the conventional journals. In general, reading
news
 on the platform
bring
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 quite a lot of benefits to us. At
first
, since the Internet is always updated, we can have information quickly without paying any money.
This
 one can be accessible
everytime
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 providing you connect the Wifi.
Secondly
, online
news
 expands our horizons about the world situation,exciting fields or popular trends…What’s more, the combination between words and images helps us approach the
news
 easier.
Conversely
, traditional newspapers result in many effects. To produce it,the tree must be cut down so as to take the wood pulp.
Therefore
,
this
do
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 harm to
environment
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 and ecosystem.
In addition
, the conventional journals even make
the
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human health worse. Specifically, the printing ink could cling
onto
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 the refreshments people use.
Then
 after eating, they may run a risk of having pathogens. To conclude, I strongly believe that humans would have a deep understanding of which is more convenient, and one day,
the
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online
news
 will replace the position of newspapers.
Submitted by Dương Nguyễn on

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • reliable
  • credible
  • focused
  • immersive
  • tangibility
  • tradition
  • access
  • digital devices
  • demographics
  • older generation
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