Some people think young people should follow the traditions of their society. Others think that they should be free to behave as individuals. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Following the tradition of their own society is considered as a good character of the youth, according to many. Others believe that they need to
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as per their preference. In my opinion, I support the view latter’ s concept as
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much freedom in their life. On the one hand, when
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youngster follows his own way of lifestyle is better than forcing them to adopt
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practice that they are not at all interested
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is because if anyone can live without hurting others feeling,
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society.
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, presently, in the western world, they rarely enforce their people
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culture as they are hugely supporting personal interest than anything else.
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, on the other side, the opponents of the above- mentioned argument say that it is crucial to follow the cultural aspects of the place anyone grows and lives. They tend to believe
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practice strengthens the ties with their roots, cultivates patriotic feeling, ultimately, brings unity as well.
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, wherever, citizens are asked to follow the cultural practices often created political turmoil. In conclusion,
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it is sometimes thought that youngsters need to be
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their
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beliefs, I firmly think that people should be allowed to decide
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they want to adopt
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their life or not.
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