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As a result of tourism and the increasing number of people travelling, there is a growing demand for more flights. What problems does this have on the environment? What measures could be taken to solve the problems?

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Over the
last
 decades, there
have
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 been an upward trend of tourists
likewise
 there is a climbing demand for more
flights
.
However
, it would be challenging for the environment due to a variety of issues. The objective of
this
 essay is to investigate some problems of
flights
on
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 nature, suggest possible solutions and evaluate them. It is considered that the environmental negative impact of
flights
 is tightly connected with
the
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 large number of guests.
In other words
, every flight produces a significant amount of traffic fumes which in turn damage the atmosphere and contributes to climate change.
For instance
, according to the experts,
the
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aviation accounts approximately 3% of the total greenhouse effect.
Consequently
, the increasing number of individuals travelling by plane will lead to different ecological setbacks.
This
 problem could be tackled by limiting
number
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 of
flights
 by leaving only important trips.
On the contrary
,
this
 measure might be less possible because it will require updates in
law
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 sphere especially in
“freedom
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 of human” section and agreement of the society.
Moreover
, the solution might be the construction of modern planes which will not release oxide of nitrogen by allocating funds of
government
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.
This
 measure is likely possible, if government allocate the budget,
this
 solution will be
positive
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 effect to get rid of
this
 challenge. To sum up, all aforementioned points illustrate that despite the gradual rise of tourists, the environment might face
with
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serious difficulties due to the
flights
. As far as I am concerned, in future, there will be a range of measurements to prevent air pollution without any restrictions
of
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flights
.
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