At the present time, the population of some countries includes a relatively large number of young adults, compared with the number of older people. Do the advantages of this situation outweigh the disadvantages?

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era, the population of some countries remarkably massive in the count of youngsters as compared with the number

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is growing in the number of adults and that will

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to the positive

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youngsters

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more properly and enthusiastically.

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year, the survey conducted by the regime of

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in returns they received

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amount of money to provide, bread and butter to their family. The result was shocking, only 15% of older

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would able to

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properly but 85% youngsters did amazing

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have more stamina, there are many

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as, exercise, healthy diet, jogging, positive mindset, memory power and so on. Young

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always ready to take a leap and any chance to

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hard and do something for their country, they have that positive attitude to crack any business meeting to make plans, or to construct malls, good roads, stadiums, build

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the country could earn more

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economy

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nation.

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, older

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faced many

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issues comparatively with young

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enhance individuals knowledge and along with

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we started to learn social

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successful career path.

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get older they lossen their will power and energy they experienced more

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issues

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, poor sight, short term memory loss, you name it.

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kind of

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issue older

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will not able do any

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properly and they do not have

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7 to 9 hours daily. To conclude, considering above mentioned point it is evident that, the advantage of the situation outweigh the disadvantage because young adults compose

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society and create

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powerful economics.

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