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Some people think that the only way to have a success in business is to have a unique product. What factors, do you think, influence the success of a company?

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Nowadays, a section of society believes that success can be measured by only having unique items in their store.I completely disagree with
this
 view,
However
, there are lot more factors that influence the
customers
, having the uniqueness of the
products
 is just
one
 of them.I shall examine
the
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some factors on
this
 in the following paragraphs.
Firstly
,commercials and advertisement are essential to grab the attention of the
customers
.
This
 influence the people
mind set
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 to buy those items while
their
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they
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 are shopping.
However
,
customers
are much choose
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 about their particular brands.
For example
,
a
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 Apple company has
advertise
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 their
product
 in the market.
Therefore
, same as the other
products
 like Nokia,Vivo, oppo so on.
As a result
,
sallers
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sellers
sales
 for
the
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Apple company
products
 are always high.Due to the brand value in the market.
Secondly
, the quality of
product
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 gives the
customers
 satisfaction it can
also
improves
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 the resales of those items.
Moreover
,
thesedays
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these days
alot
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a lot
lot
 of
companys
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companies
 are coming up with
a different offers
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different offers
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 like the
one
 plus
one
 offer with
product
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the product
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 and giving free item with other
products
also
take aways
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takeaways
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 all these helps them to attract the clients which improve their
sales
.For instances, In normal days the
sales
 are quit
contanst
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content
 with the
companys
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company
company's
.Whereas, in the festival sessions are any
sales
 days the range of the
salese
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sales
sale
 were
quit
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 high in number
,
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 because customer
attract
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 for the offers on those days. In conclusion, advertising of the
product
 is
one
 of the key
point
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also
 with the brand value in the society.
Therefore
, the quality of the item
also
 increases the
sales
 and the offers will play a wide role
on
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 the
successfully
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 business.
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