Nowadays, people care about their appearance more than before. Do you agree or disagree? Give your reasons.

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Generally,
people
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are more fashion- conscious these days. The
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number of beauty salons testifies
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statement. There are a large number of reasons behind
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attitude. The
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culprit is
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media
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the media
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.
Media
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is responsible for
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glorifying
people
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like models and
flim
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film
stars.
People
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are made to believe that everything they put on is necessary to keep
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up to date. To illustrate,
media
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if
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flooded with advertisements
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beauty products,
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, and clothes. Most of these products are aimed at females or children as it is believed that they are more vulnerable to
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influences.
Media
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gave birth to the dictum ' better be out of the world than out of fashion'. The propaganda they promote is that being modern and good-looking is as vital a food and shelter. Yet another reason for
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trend is the coming up of new professions like hospitality and management. It is a part of these professions to be good-looking and charming to attract
people
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. There was a time when
people
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gave far less stress on appearance as their life was
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and as
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had far less influence on them.
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, the nature of jobs has changed markedly. The modern glamorous professions require
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an attractive
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personality, which includes linguistic skills and most importantly,
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physical appearance. In total, it seems that being fashionable is an inescapable inevitability in these modern days and the reason behind
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change is that to survive in modern society,
people
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need it. As they say," while in Rome, do as Romans do".
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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