Some people believe that money is more important than free time for a good quality of life. Others say the opposite is true. Discuss both views. What is more important in your opinion? Give relevant examples.

Few people
beleive
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believe
that only
money
is more
valuabe
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valuable
and can provide good quality of
life
compared to free
time
. In my
opinion
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free
time
is more valuable than
money
to lead a happy and quality
life
.
Money
can be earned anytime but
time
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the time
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we can regain it.
Upcoming
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The upcoming
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paragraph will give
further
information related to my opinion. Yes ,
i
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I
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agree that to lead
a
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sophisticated
life
money
is important, but to continue to have that
life
they have to work hard each and every moment for
whole
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their whole
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life
without enjoying what they have earned and
also
they will not have
few
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a few
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memorable
momemnts
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moments
with their loved ones.
For instance
,
Film
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in Film
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celebraties
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celebrities
, They need to travel all the
time
to
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outdoor for
stooting
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shooting
and to earn
money
due to which they cannot stay for
long
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a long
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period with their family and
also
can spend
time
for
self
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themselves
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.But we change
this
by limiting our works and by giving priority to family than
money
.
Secondly
,
person
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a person
the person
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with free
time
,
This
man can plan his
time
with family ,
self growth
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self-growth
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and
also
spend some
time
on his hobbies to lead and pleasant and
happly
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happy
happily
life
with his own rules.
Money
is
also
important to survive but not as much as
time
. We can earn
money
which
help
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helps
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us feed and get what is is needed.
For example
, Workers in factories or any other
industies
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industries
,
they
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apply
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are happy with the income they earn and
spendthe
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spend the
remaining available
time
with family. In conclusion, In each and every person
life
money
and
time
plays
a
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the
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main role and are important. But when compared in between them , We can't get
time
which is lost but can earn
money
which we don't have. So
Time
is more important than
money
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