Some people believe that money is more important than free time for a good quality of life. Others say the opposite is true. Discuss both views. What is more important in your opinion? Give relevant examples.
Few people
beleive
that only Correct your spelling
believe
money
is more valuabe
and can provide good quality of Correct your spelling
valuable
life
compared to free time
. In my opinion
free Add a comma
,opinion
time
is more valuable than money
to lead a happy and quality life
. Money
can be earned anytime but time
we can regain it. Add an article
the time
Upcoming
paragraph will give Add an article
The upcoming
An upcoming
further
information related to my opinion.
Yes , i
agree that to lead Change the capitalization
I
a
sophisticated Remove the article
apply
life
money
is important, but to continue to have that life
they have to work hard each and every moment for whole
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their whole
life
without enjoying what they have earned and also
they will not have few
memorable Correct article usage
a few
momemnts
with their loved ones. Correct your spelling
moments
For instance
, Film
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in Film
celebraties
, They need to travel all the Correct your spelling
celebrities
time
to
outdoor for Change preposition
apply
stooting
and to earn Correct your spelling
shooting
money
due to which they cannot stay for long
period with their family and Correct article usage
a long
also
can spend time
for self
.But we change Correct pronoun usage
themselves
this
by limiting our works and by giving priority to family than money
.
Secondly
, person
with free Add an article
a person
the person
time
, This
man can plan his time
with family , self growth
and Add a hyphen
self-growth
also
spend some time
on his hobbies to lead and pleasant and happly
Correct your spelling
happy
happily
life
with his own rules. Money
is also
important to survive but not as much as time
. We can earn money
which help
us feed and get what is is needed. Change the verb form
helps
For example
, Workers in factories or any other industies
, Correct your spelling
industries
they
are happy with the income they earn and Correct pronoun usage
apply
spendthe
remaining available Correct your spelling
spend the
time
with family.
In conclusion, In each and every person life
money
and time
plays a
main role and are important. But when compared in between them , We can't get Change the article
the
time
which is lost but can earn money
which we don't have. So Time
is more important than money
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