Although families have influence on a children’s development, factors outside the home play a bigger part in their lives nowadays. To what extent do you agree with this?

Being the closest surrounding for the
children
,
families
affect their growth.
However
, external factors from outside of the house
also
have a greater
influence
on them.
Parents
and siblings
influence
the
children’s
growth more significantly because
children
spend most of the time with them and earliest education
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provided by them, but there
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also
some external impact from
outside
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neighborhood
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.
Parents
and siblings could affect
children’s
development more significantly
because
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various reasons.
Firstly
,
children
spend most of the time with their
families
at
home
from they were babies.
This
makes
children
tend to imitate their
families
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at
home
.
This
is the reason why the psychologist
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the
parents
to be careful at their doings in front of their
children
such
as not to get angry easily or talk
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other in front of the
children
.
Secondly
,
parents
are the
first
the teacher in every
children’s
life. In fact, from the
first
word, or language the babies learned until good manner and socializing skills are learned from their
parents
.
On the other hand
, some external factors might hold some levels of
influence
too. Internet
that is
accessed through smartphone or computer, provide
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many
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information
that is
absorbed by the
children
and sometimes interesting materials from the internet could make
children’s
surf the sites all day. Even online games could demotivate
children
to study at
home
. Other than that, friends at school or around
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neighborhood
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might
also
change the
children’s
behavior
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.
For example
, if when their friends invite them to skip the class,
then
they could really do that
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even though
it is forbidden by their
parents
at
home
. In conclusion,
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even though
families
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a significant
influence
on
the
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children’s
development, it can not be denied that external factors might affect them too. I think it is
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responsibility to educate the
children
and supervise them wisely so that the
children
would listen more to their
families
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Proliferation
  • Media
  • Technology
  • Peer influence
  • Extracurricular activities
  • Educational institutions
  • Character building
  • Social norms
  • Global community
  • Cultural exchange
  • Marketing
  • Advertising
  • Preferences
  • Values
  • Government policies
  • Standardized education
  • Child welfare programs
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