In many countries, traditional customs are being lost. Why do you think this is? What can parents and schools do to keep traditional customs alive?

For many people in the
world
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their culture is what defines them and their society. It influences what they believe in as well as their lifestyle.
Although
,
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older generation follow their culture as much as they can, some people of the family are slowly
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losing
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loosing
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losing
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touch with their traditional
customs
.
This
can be
beacuse
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because
of several reasons which
this
essay discusses.
To begin
with,
customs
are certain activities that have long been
practiced
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by a family. These
customs
take part in several stages of our life including
on
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our birth, marriage and death.
However
, our world has become
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fast-paced
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fact-paced
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and more competitive than ever.
As a result
, it has become increasingly difficult to take out time to indulge in ethnic traditions.
For example
, in my
religion
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there is a custom to pray to the sun every morning but sometimes I don't have time for it as my morning commute to work takes me 2 hours.
Additionally
,
schools
are becoming more focused to teach skills
which
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are more inclined towards technical knowledge and are spending
less
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resources on providing means to learn about the old practices.
This
has led to a
lost
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loss
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of ethnic values and
customs
but there are some remedies that can fix
this
. The key to address the issue of losing our traditional culture is through our parents and
schools
.
Firstly
,
schools
should introduce classes and material that focus on the importance of
balance
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the balance
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of work-life and conventional practices.
This
will not only improve their quality of life in future but
also
help young children to know their roots and get familiar with some of the conventional activities.
Finally
, parents should get their kids involved in their religious practices as much as they can so that they can establish a connection between the kids and the long-established tradition. To conclude, with the help of
schools
and parents the lost values of our long-established tradition can be recovered. Having a way for the people to connect to their old
customs
can enable them to understand and practice those values and activities again.
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