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Some people say that modern technology has made life too complicated and the solution is for everyone tolive a simpler life and avoid using technology. Do you agree or disagree? Give examples from your own knowldge and experience.

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Time spins and with every ,spin a new change comes. Now automation becomes the backbone of human life and without ,
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put one step forward. It has many pros and cons in different ways which I will mention in upcoming paragraphs.I disagree with
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 crowd think automation made life complicated So, use machinery in limit is the solution.
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 can call anyone in the world or transfer money in minutes at any corner of the world.So while avoiding machinery it will damage or take far away from our near and dear.
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 automation is the better thing if
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 keep it at a limit.
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, everyone now depends on
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 so it would be hard to come again on post letter than emails.
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 of all,it has many negative effects on a person's life
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 due to
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 gadgets nation spend most of the time on gadgets for games, office works,household works which make them lazy and unfit.With
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will disappear physical work with the replacement of robots.In the same way,
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 produces only technical machines but not natural feeling which is more important for human beings.For ,example in ,schools if teachers replaced by
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 gadgets
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 it will be disastrous for those students who are weak in studies.
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