Some people believe that young people who commit serious crimes should be punished in the same way as adults. Agree or Disagree?

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ratio will
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when mistake should be punished. It is often argued that whether
adoloscent
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adolescent
is done any offence they should be punished like
mature
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a mature
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person
. A fair amount of people think that
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undoubtedly
youth should be punished like
adult
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an adult
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when they are done
illegal
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mistake while we never will forgive to the youth
person
. I strongly agree with
this
statement because
age
does not matter to punished
besides
we think about their
crime
rate
only so irrefutably teenage
person
should be punished the same way as
grown
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a grown
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person
. On the one hand, inevitably
penalty
ration
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ratio
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will increase automatically crimes ratio reduced whether adolescent, grown-up. Some clever criminals who teen easily will
esacape
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escape
why their
age
does not complete mature
age
even they have done serious offence
such
as rape case, murder and etc. our
law
also
will help for their release from deep
penalty
.
Therefore
defenetly
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definitely
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young
person
should be punished when they have been done
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the serious
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crime
.
This
only will decline the
crime
rate
otherwise
will increase.
For example
, the
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Gulf
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countries
law
are very strict nobody
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escape
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from
penalty
whether under
adult
,
adult
.
Therefore
these
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nation
crime
rate
is not much compare
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other
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parts of
teh
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the
world.
On the other hand
, when under matured
person
will be afraid about heavy
penalty
while they never do any breaking
law
action.
this
means government
law
will threaten
to
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all
age
group especially
the
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apply
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criminals.
For example
,
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according
to the survey said that more than 50% of teenager does
many
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serious offence
activity
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but they are not punished heavily
because
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their
age
. To conclude, every nation will be patient without doing any
voilation
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violation
in order to any
person
should be punished when they have done
crime
action. We must change our laws for all criminals.
This
means
noone
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no one
none
esacpe
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escape
from punishment. Whether youth,
adult
it does not matter about the
age
it means for the
crime
rate
so
undoubtably
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undoubtedly
under grown-up
person
should be punished like
grown-up
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a grown-up
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.
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