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Some people think that the best way to improve road safety is reducing the amount of maximum speed of vehicles. Other thing that other ways exist. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Many
people
 argue that the only way for having a safe and secure roadway is to
dicrease
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decrease
increase
 the limit of the speed for
drivers
. While some others believe that, there are a number of
ways
, which can lead
drivers
 to drive more carefully. Personally, in my
opinion
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,opinion
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 accidents can be prevented by some other practical
ways
. There is
belief
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a belief
the belief
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 among
people
, many accidents are happened due to the lack of suitable speed limit. Many roads have created in cities and between cities which are demands more speed attention and
people
 must decrease their speeds compared with speed limit suggestion. As result, many cars will be crashed without any personal mistake.
On the other
hand
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 others said that there is a wide range of practical
ways
 which can lead
drivers
 to be safe.
For example
, one of the most productive things that can help
drivers
 is traffic
signs
 improvement. Many roads are without or no traffic
signs
, which have played a crucial role in
people
's drive. Many of them, more specific at the night, drive based on these important
signs
 and because of none traffic
signs
 they get into serious problems. In
conclution
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conclusion
, based on my experience there are some other important
ways
 for reducing the number of roads accidents. Some rull and regulation must be set by the government for
drivers
. Heavy taxes should be more practical and brings more attention to
drivers
 ,
Also
 I believe that
development
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the development
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 of
people
 awareness can be effective. Some Tv programs and advertisements can have a significant impact on
people
, which can prevent any accident by themselves.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • road safety
  • maximum speed
  • speed limits
  • reaction time
  • stopping distance
  • fatality
  • driving habits
  • traffic education
  • road infrastructure
  • vehicle safety
  • enforcement
  • traffic laws
  • technology integration
  • traffic management
  • high-risk areas
  • strategic planning
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