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Some people think that the best way to improve road safety is reducing the amount of maximum speed of vehicles. Other thing that other ways exist. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Many
people
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 argue that the only way for having a safe and secure roadway is to
dicrease
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decrease
increase
 the limit of the speed for
drivers
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. While some others believe that, there are a number of
ways
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, which can lead
drivers
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 to drive more carefully. Personally, in my
opinion
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,opinion
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 accidents can be prevented by some other practical
ways
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. There is
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a belief
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 among
people
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, many accidents are happened due to the lack of suitable speed limit. Many roads have created in cities and between cities which are demands more speed attention and
people
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 must decrease their speeds compared with speed limit suggestion. As result, many cars will be crashed without any personal mistake.
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 others said that there is a wide range of practical
ways
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 which can lead
drivers
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 to be safe.
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, one of the most productive things that can help
drivers
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 is traffic
signs
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 improvement. Many roads are without or no traffic
signs
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, which have played a crucial role in
people
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's drive. Many of them, more specific at the night, drive based on these important
signs
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 and because of none traffic
signs
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 they get into serious problems. In
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conclusion
, based on my experience there are some other important
ways
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 for reducing the number of roads accidents. Some rull and regulation must be set by the government for
drivers
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. Heavy taxes should be more practical and brings more attention to
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 I believe that
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 of
people
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 awareness can be effective. Some Tv programs and advertisements can have a significant impact on
people
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, which can prevent any accident by themselves.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • road safety
  • maximum speed
  • speed limits
  • reaction time
  • stopping distance
  • fatality
  • driving habits
  • traffic education
  • road infrastructure
  • vehicle safety
  • enforcement
  • traffic laws
  • technology integration
  • traffic management
  • high-risk areas
  • strategic planning
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