IELTS Writing Correction Service /
Writing Samples /
Band 6

People’s shopping habits depend on more on the age group they belong to than any other factor. Agree or disagree

#people’s #habits #age #group #factor
It is certainly true that shopping has become increasingly common among
people
. Some
people
 think that shopping preferences are more popular with elderly
people
 rather than any age groups. I do not quite agree with
this
 statement while I do admit that younger are doing shopping more rather than adults
people
. On the one hand, there is a wide range of reasons why I think that in terms of shopping it doesn’t maintain any age groups actually it totally depends on human own financial status and ability. The
first
 point is that as the world is becoming more modern as well as
people
 are being addicted to shopping. In
this
 country every individual financial ability is not equal and who is a Rich person only they are doing shopping more rather than poor
people
. Rich young and adult person both are buying multifarious things together
this
 is because they can afford it.For
this
 ,reasons I am opposed to
this
 idea and it doesn’t maintain specific age As opposed to,
i
Change the capitalization
I
show examples
 will start by Looking at why
i
Change the capitalization
I
show examples
 support the view with
this
 question.
Firstly
, it is obviously clear that most of the country
people
 their young generation shopping demand is high more than old
people
. At present teenagers are giving concentration on Their lifestyles and it is unrealistic to think that they are busy about how to become modern
also
 how to purchase new Fashion things. Indeed it has matured on Their hobby as well as they feel comfortable.
Therefore
 they are not concern about their financial status and anyway they would like to do shopping less. To sum up, I strongly believe that the financial sector is the major point of shopping.
Submitted by minhaj2001 on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

What to do next:
Look at other essays: