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Nowadays people waste a lot of food that was brought from a shops and restaurant. Why do you think people waste food? What can be done to reduce the amount of food they throw away?

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 necessity of all human beings,
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 most people in urban areas particularly in
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 is a major concern.
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 wastage and how public awareness can help solve
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 issue. High income is a major factor behind the rise in
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.Nowadays, most of the people have a high salary of income which means a big salary is allocated to buy more foods or eat in their favourite restaurant. For ,instance 20 years ago, the average family has around 100$ per month to spend on
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 and entertainment,
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 in today's
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 one family has a 1000$ a month for groceries only,so the idea of buying something which
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 not important or not consuming is unremarkable. the family who eats in the restaurant doesn't care about the leftover
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 because they already paid for it.
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 is a major reason why
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 wastage is dramatically increasing and it's a major concern in society. Solving these issues
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involves local authorities and leaders of the community. They should make a campaign or social awareness about the impact of
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food
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 our environment and discuss the importance of
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 in other countries.
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 in some part of
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 Africa, millions of children died because of malnourishment.one of the problems in
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. African natives use mud as a basic ingredient of making bread in order to sustain their need for
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 community leaders can educate people better on practical matters
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 as shopping smarter and cooking enough amount of
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. In conclusion, giving campaign and public awareness by local authorities can lessen
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waste
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 in the future.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • food waste
  • overbuying
  • portion sizes
  • expiration dates
  • meal planning
  • food preservation
  • cultural norms
  • social norms
  • storage techniques
  • distribution systems
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