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Some parents and teachers think that children’s behaviour should be strictly controlled. While some think that children should be free to behave. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Children
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 the buds of every nation.
Childhood
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period
 is the best part of
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the human
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 entire life and we can not replace
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it again
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.
However
, a fair amount of
parents
 and teacher think that child
behavior
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behaviour
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 should be strictly
monite
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monitored
monitor
.
Nevertheless
, some person
think
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thinks
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 that
children
 should be free to behave. I will discuss both views points and
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i
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 would give my stand.
To begin
 with, there are many reasons to toddler
behaviour
 must be controlled.
firstly
, kids are not a
matured
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 person like
adult
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an adult
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 so we should control their each and every
behaviour
 because
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they do not know how to behave in front of elders as well as
strange
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a strange
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 person.
Secondly
,
childhood
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the childhood
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period
 only learn and follow good action and
behaviour
otherwise
 they never change their good attitude due to they used to.
Thirdly
, teachers and
parents
 are taught to best
characterstics
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characteristics
 for their child along with always check too.
For instance
,
accroding
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according
 to the survey said that more than 75% of
public
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the public
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 has
good
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a good
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 attitude since their childhood
period
 after
grown-up
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grown up
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 they never do any misleading action because
of
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their
parents
 and teachers were been strictly supervising.
Although
,
children
 are like
a
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free bird so we do not put into
cage
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a cage
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 by strictly controlled. we can allow to their attitude whether good or bad because they can learn from
them
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the
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mistake
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a mistake
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.
Parents
are give
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are given
are giving
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 freedom to their rectify mistake from themselves.
Moreover
,
this
 age part never come again because
of
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this
 is a golden
period
 of time so we could grant to
children
 without any
restiction
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restriction
 to behave. To conclude, undoubtedly
children
behaviour
 should be supervised when they will be matured
man
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,man
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. Other side kids are
easily
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to
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behaved without any restriction.
However
, in my opinion about
this
 statement babies are behaved without any hindrance. Because they should modify their
behaviour
 and
chracter
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character
 to themselves when they will be
a
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an
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 adult.
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