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Some people think it is one of the best ways to solve the environmental problems by increasing the cost of fuels for cars and other vehicles

#people #cost #fuels #cars #vehicles
Environmental
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The environmental
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 crisis is growing rapidly and has become a threat to mankind. Some people opine that escalation of fuel
prices
 will decrease
this
problem
 ,
however
, I completely disagree with
this
 statement as
this
 notion may
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effect
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affect
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 the economy not only of a nation but the whole world. There are several alternatives available to tackle
this
problem
. On the one hand, many masses argued that increasing the
prices
 of fuel will help to reduce
environmental
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the environmental
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problem
 but it will have perilous impacts on the market of society. Petrol is
backbone
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the backbone
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 of
transportation
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 sector ,
therefore
, the cost of
this
 fuel will not only cause the
prices
 of essential commodities to increase but
also
currency
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 value of a particular nation will start deprecating.
Consequentlly
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Consequently
, It will increase the inflation rate as well as poverty.
For instance
, transportation is required to deliver goods and services in the country and if
prices
 of
petrolium
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petroleum
 will hike it will indirectly
effect
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 the economy and rate of goods which make these articles costly.
On the other hand
, a plethora of methods can be used to mitigate
this
problem
 .
Firstly
,
authority
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 can motivate the population by rum campaign fore awareness to
use
 renewable energy for travelling as
subsitute
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substitute
 of petrol and diesel will be work as
booster
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a booster
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 . Biodiesel can be
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 as it is totally made up of
vegetables
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 oils and animals fats and it emits
low
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a low
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 level of gasses into the atmosphere. Moving
further
,
government
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the government
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 can improve the condition of
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public
publiv
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the publiv
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 vehicle sector by investing some lavish amount of money so that people can
use
 public transport
instead
 of
personal
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a personal
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 car .
Such
 as, if
timing
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 and services of mass transit
has
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 been improved and timing will be fixed
then
 it will be easy for local individuals to
use
 it . To conclude, technology give
human
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a human
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 a number of options to
use
 ,
however
, most of
people
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the people
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 are
unawre
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unaware
abot
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about
 it so government should run
camapign
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campaign
campaigns
 for awareness so that everyone can put their efforts to tackle with
this
 situation.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Environmental preservation
  • Sustainable transportation
  • Green technologies
  • Alternative energy sources
  • Renewable energy
  • Fuel-efficient vehicles
  • Electric vehicles (EVs)
  • Public transportation
  • Traffic congestion
  • Economic impact
  • Consumer behavior
  • Disproportionate effect
  • Government subsidies
  • Comprehensive policies
  • Cost-effective solutions
  • Carbon footprint reduction
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