When there is a rise in the standard of living, people in the cities are more benefited than those in rural areas. Please give your opinion on the problems arising from this discrimination.
Globalization,
Industrailization
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Industrialization
have
come with many advantages. New technology in the field of communication, automobiles, and electronic devices are increasing Change the verb form
has
living
standard of Correct article usage
the living
people
. Especially, public
who live in Add an article
the public
a public
a
urban Correct the article-noun agreement
apply
areas
have
more benefit than in rural Change the verb form
has
areas
. With this
discrimination comes with
many Change preposition
apply
problem
in Change to a plural noun
problems
the
society. In the following statement, I give my opinion on rising problems due to provided statement.
Begin with, the Government main focus on the development of Correct article usage
apply
cities
. In the cities
, they have benefited like taxpayer are more in cities
rather in urban areas
. There
economy Replace the word
Their
depend
on the big Change the verb form
depends
cities
. Due to this
reason
they neglect the development of the urban Add a comma
,reason
areas
. In the village, community
do not have Correct article usage
the community
much
resources Change the quantifier
many
like
in the urban area. Change preposition
as
For example
, medical services, road, and many more facilites
are not available in the village. when these have an emergency case related health issue Correct your spelling
facilities
then
they face a harsh reality and they have to travell
a long distance to the hospital.
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travel
Furthermore
, in the village, the main occupation is farming and the generations are very fasinated
toward western culture. They leave their home town to get a job and live a standard life like in the Correct your spelling
fascinated
cities
. Old people
have to do farming on their own. Farming is not a
easy job. If Change the article
an
farmer
does not do their farming Add an article
a farmer
the farmer
then
in the future people
have to face food
crisis.
To conclude, everyone wants a standard Add an article
a food
living
but the Government never neglect the rural Change preposition
of living
areas
to maintain the urban areas
. All people
have rights
to get Correct article usage
the rights
the
basic need. It is Correct article usage
apply
a
government responsibility to provide these things to everyone.Correct article usage
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