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Both the poor and the rich find the accessibility into university difficult. Do you agree or disagree?

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Universities are
good
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 way
for
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study
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. But I would like to talk about rich
people
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 and poor
people
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 find
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accessibility
into
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university
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 difficult.
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,
i
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 m partially agree with
this
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 statement. Because
university
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study
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 is very tough.
Beside
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this
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,
i
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 will mention
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 the following paragraphs.
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 of all,
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study
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the study
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 is very necessary for everyone like as, poor
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 and rich
people
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.
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,
university
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study
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 is very hard.But it is
a
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depend on
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brainpower. Sometimes poor
people
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is
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 very intelligent than rich
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. So
university
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study
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 is not discrimination with any
people
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. With help of
university
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study
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,study
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people
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 can get
good
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a good
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 destination. So it is very essential for both.
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 of all, rich
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 doing
corruption
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. Because it is not good very poor
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.
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, poor
people
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 do not get easily admission
in
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to
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the
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university
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.
However
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, poor
people
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 can not afford
university
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 fees. As well as it
also
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weak
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the weak
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 point of poor
people
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. So it is very tough for them. Nowadays poor
people
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 become poorer and rich become richer.
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, rich
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 exploit the poor
people
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 in the
university
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.So
university
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 should make strict rules
of
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 both. As well as
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university
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the university
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 is not interested in corruption.With the help of
study
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 poor
people
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 can get
good
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the good
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 destination,
for instance
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, accountant,engineer,and manger, To summarise,So
university
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play
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significant
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a significant
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 role for both rich and poor.
Furthermore
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,
university
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study
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 is very necessary for everyone.Because
people
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 can get good jobs in every field. As well as with the help of
study
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 poor
people
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 earn the good money.

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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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