Both the poor and the rich find the accessibility into university difficult. Do you agree or disagree?

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Universities are

good

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way

for

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study

. But I would like to talk about rich

people

and poor

people

find

the

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accessibility

into

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university

difficult.

Furthermore

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m partially agree with

this

statement. Because

university

study

is very tough.

Beside

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this

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will mention

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it in

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the following paragraphs.

First

of all,

study

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the study

a study

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is very necessary for everyone like as, poor

people

and rich

people

Moreover

university

study

is very hard.But it is

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depend on

the

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brainpower. Sometimes poor

people

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very intelligent than rich

people

. So

university

study

is not discrimination with any

people

. With help of

university

study

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people

can get

good

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destination. So it is very essential for both.

Second

of all, rich

people

doing

corruption

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. Because it is not good very poor

people

Furthermore

, poor

people

do not get easily admission

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the

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university

However

, poor

people

can not afford

university

fees. As well as it

also

weak

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the weak

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point of poor

people

. So it is very tough for them. Nowadays poor

people

become poorer and rich become richer.

Furthermore

, rich

people

exploit the poor

people

in the

university

.So

university

should make strict rules

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for

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both. As well as

university

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the university

a university

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is not interested in corruption.With the help of

study

poor

people

can get

good

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the good

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destination,

for instance

, accountant,engineer,and manger, To summarise,So

university

play

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significant

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role for both rich and poor.

Furthermore

university

study

is very necessary for everyone.Because

people

can get good jobs in every field. As well as with the help of

study

poor

people

earn the good money.

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Both the poor and the rich find the accessibility into university difficult. Do you agree or disagree?

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

Children find it difficult to concentrate on or pay attention to their studies in school. What are the reasons? How can we solve this problem?

You are going to visit the town where your friend went to university. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter: • explain why you will be visiting the town • give details of where you will be staying • ask your friend to recommend some evening entertainment.

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The quality of health care a person receives should not depend on the size of their bank balance.The government is responsible for providing a high level of health care for all its citizens.To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Some people think that it is important to use leisure time for activities that improve the mind, such as reading and doing word puzzles. Other people feel that it is important to rest the mind during leisure time. Discuss both views and give your opinion.