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In many places, new homes are needed, but the only place available for building them is in the country side. Some people believe it is more important to protect the country side and not building new homes there. What is your opinion about this?

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In the modern era, there is a huge surge in the world population every year and home is a basic requirement of every individual. So, everywhere in the world, organisations are converting farmland and into
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residential
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. Some people do not agree with losing agricultural
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 for new buildings. In my point of view, providing homes to the public is more essential for nowadays but we have to take care of cultivated
land
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 as well.
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, if any country has a higher population
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 they should have a system which will fulfil the basic needs of society like a house,food and clothes.
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, they have to reduce their agricultural
land
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 for providing
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shelter to the public or they have to pass a law which helps to control their high volume of people and public should
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 help to organisations.
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, decreasing
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a
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country side
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 is a hurdle for
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 as well as governments because they
faces
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a
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 agriculture issue in those areas and they have a hard time
to grow
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 new food because they do not have
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sufficient
land
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.
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, it is
neccessary
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necessary
 to build
a new homes
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a new home
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 but
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 every country
have
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 to keep their farming
area
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 safe. In a conclusion, both residential and
agriculture
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land
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 is important for human life but
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 should be a big problem if people rapidly building their new homes from a farming
area
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.
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, If they can manage their living in
resdential
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residential
 areas that should be a very effective step for
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 future.
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