A person’s health is their own responsibility rather than the government’s responsibility. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Health
is wealth. A
health
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public can only create
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healthy nation irrefutably and it is often argued
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question in many
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whether a person, the government who is the most responsible for a public strength. I strongly agree with
this
statement because people have more
resonsibility
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responsibility
to
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their own
health
concious
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conscious
compare
than
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the ministry. On the one hand, there are many reasons
for
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a individuals
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individuals
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should have
responsibility
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a responsibility
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to
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their own
health
compare to administration.
First
,
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ruling
rulling
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party can not focus
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and every person well-being and it is not possible
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. The population can only create
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more attention
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their good
health
condition
such
as regularly does medical checkup and strictly follow the top brass
awarness
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awareness
about
illeness
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illness
.
Secondly
, each family members have to take proper
nutician
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nutrition
foods and accurate regular
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exercise
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as a result
they can live without any troubles
health
-related.
Thirdly
, the authority people should do their proper responsibility about a woman good kilter when any catastrophe diseases will spread heavily.
For example
, in the pandemic
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situation
, the
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ruling
party is focused
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their own country the
folks
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fine fettle
such
as they are created the
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awareness
about the
corona virus
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and provides free vaccine, take
a steps
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of spreading
virus
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.
On the other hand
, a man
is represent
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the family so each guy good shape is
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most significant factor
of
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making
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good society because a good trim nation is being calculated how their
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community
health
condition-based.
Moreover
, many human
being
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said that we are paid tax to the government so they are the victim
this
is
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acceptable statement but the directorate is
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for all mankind not a single man and they do not have
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rights to do
concenration
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concentration
about a public.
For instance
,
accroding
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according
to the survey said that 60% of society are being
diseses
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diseases
because they do not care and maintain about their healthiness. To conclude, folks are being thought to live more years without any infection while they must be
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a focus
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on their own physical condition and we do not blame
to
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any one
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anyone
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to do
for
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us.
This
means my
personally
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opinion about a human should be more
awarness
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awareness
about their own body compare than the leadership.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • personal accountability
  • health outcomes
  • public health campaigns
  • regulations
  • healthcare services
  • environmental quality
  • socio-economic factors
  • governmental intervention
  • healthy living
  • informed health decisions
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