According to the World Health Organization, all international travel should end until the coronavirus has gone . Do you agree or disagree with this statement?

The World Health Organization stated that travel to a foreign country can continue when Covid-19 leaves. I agree with WHO for the following reasons. On one hand, travelling abroad always has many drawbacks
moreover
in the crucial pandemic. As you know coronavirus is highly infectious so it can break out whenever and wherever.
Although
the authorities did everything they could to control the spread of the
virus
, there has now been widespread infection throughout the world. The World Health Organisation
are
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avoiding the word pandemic but the
virus
has infected thousands of
people
. Someone can be contagious without showing any symptoms for up to two weeks so self-isolated is extremely necessary
in
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this
circumstance.
Secondly
, Asia is the
first
place
this
novel
virus
is being found .
Therefore
, many
people
in other countries put the blame on Asians. In order to prevent conflict between countries, foreign tourists need to stop travelling to other countries.
On the other hand
, you may have trouble
in
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exiting and entering a country.
This
situation would take your time.
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, many
people
put
foot
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in
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by
hidding
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isolation which leads to community transmission because the government would have troubles in taking control
international
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of international

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travelers
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. What’s more, aboard travelling is
popular
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reason causing the international transmission . For those reasons,
i
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have to advise
people
to stop travelling aboard especially where the epidemic outbreak . let’s make
this
virus
go and save many lives
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