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According to the World Health Organization, all international travel should end until the coronavirus has gone . Do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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The World Health Organization stated that travel to a foreign country can continue when Covid-19 leaves. I agree with WHO for the following reasons. On one hand, travelling abroad always has many drawbacks
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 in the crucial pandemic. As you know coronavirus is highly infectious so it can break out whenever and wherever.
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 the authorities did everything they could to control the spread of the
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, there has now been widespread infection throughout the world. The World Health Organisation
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 avoiding the word pandemic but the
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 has infected thousands of
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. Someone can be contagious without showing any symptoms for up to two weeks so self-isolated is extremely necessary
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 circumstance.
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, Asia is the
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 place
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 novel
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 is being found .
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 , many
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 in other countries put the blame on Asians. In order to prevent conflict between countries, foreign tourists need to stop travelling to other countries.
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, you may have trouble
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exiting and entering a country.
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 situation would take your time.
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, many
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 put
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 in
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 by
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 isolation which leads to community transmission because the government would have troubles in taking control
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of international
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travelers
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. What’s more, aboard travelling is
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 reason causing the international transmission . For those reasons,
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 have to advise
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 to stop travelling aboard especially where the epidemic outbreak . let’s make
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virus
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 go and save many lives
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