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Some people think it is not necessary for adults to receive education in class. Self-study is a good way for them to study more effectively. To what extent do you agree or disagree with it?

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Nowadays,
people
 argue that studying outside of the class by themselves is
more
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 productive
way
 of being educated for middle-aged
people
. I personally believe that the importance of studying in class is very incremental
,
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 if
adults
 follow a structured
self-study
 program.
Firstly
, many
people
 neglect to organize their
schedule
 to be successful in their studies, so that they turn to organizations
which
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 offer them
detailed
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 curriculum.
However
, if
adults
 spare some time on researching the content and consulting with experienced graduates, they can professionally create a
schedule
 addressing
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their abilities and availability. In
this
way
, they can work on their problems by themselves, as they are the only one who is aware of their insufficiencies.
For instance
,
adults
 who prepare for their qualification exams as a requirement of their job description, tend to be more successful when they take a
self-study
 phase on the preparation period and organize a detailed syllabus typical for them.
People
 can be even more effective when they find a study-mate for self-preparation.
Secondly
,
self-study
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 preparation period is more flexible and budget-friendly for
adults
. Since they don’t need to follow a
schedule
 other
people
 produced for them, they can easily make changes in their timetable as long as it doesn’t lead to procrastination.
Additionally
, to increase the responsibility and motivation
people
 can ask an experienced friend to be a mentor and guide them during their journey. Above all, they can spend money on needed books or online courses,
instead
 of being charged fortunes by tutors. To sum up, I concur that
self-study
 is an effective
way
 of learning, if proper measurements are made
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 because in
this
way
people
 are more likely to have a flexible
schedule
 to address their own needs.
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