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Environmental problems are too big for individual countries and individual people to address. We have reached the stage where the only way to protect the environment is to address it at an international level. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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Nowadays, dealing with environmental issues has been
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unmanagable
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unmanageable
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 burden for
countries
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 and citizens to act individually.
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, some people think that
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global collaboration is the
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 chance for us to preserve our nature. I strongly agree with
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industrialization
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 period, fossil fuels in developing
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 were exploited which resulted in the contamination of massive lands. Most of
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 actions have been taken by developed
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 which were so focused on growing their economies,
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result
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 they completely neglected the fact about environmental destruction. Even though
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 there are some organizations located in under-developed
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 dealing with environmental issues, they don’t have enough capacity to diminish the level of damage
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 been done to their environment due to the lack of technologies and specialized professionals. So, in order to see desirable
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 highly-developed
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 should exchange their years of experience in technologies and establishing strategies with under-developed
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.
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, it is clear that every incremental change on our planet has an impact on each part of it. Years of observations have proven the effect of global warming on all sides of the world which originated from
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the increasing
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 level of carbon dioxide
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 the
atmoshpere
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atmosphere
. As global warming is a heating debate,
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 need to come together and launch a detailed program to deal with
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 problem. Since they have diverse experience on
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 topic, collaboration could have effective results. One clear example of
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 of working together can be United Nation’s environmental programs which
are being continuing
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 in various
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 and have
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structured
 agenda. Owing to
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separately
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 small effect on improvement because of the high level of pollution and destruction.
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