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The only way to be successful in a business is being good at maths to what extent do you agree or disagree

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Nowadays,
business
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 is the most common subject, which is teaching globally. A person requires some new ideas to become a successful businessman, and I
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 partially agree that the fundamental mathematical theories facilitate becoming a better businessman. All the
business
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, whatever
people
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 are engaging measured by the figures. A person who understands statistics well will manipulate the industry and become a rewarding businessman. Mathematical theories involve almost all the transactions;
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, if a person wants to minus, add, divide or multiply, they should have learned basic
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.
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, without that, they will not be able to decide and cannot demonstrate the exact figures to the
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 parties.
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, only being good at
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 is not working for all the times as most successful
business
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people
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 have a university degree in commerce. It mainly requires some innovation skills and contemporary
business
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 ideas. But if they want to graduate in the
business
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 subject need to enhance their
math
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 skills to some extent. In comparison, most successful
business
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people
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 use new technologies to calculate profit and loss and develop advanced systems to keep accounts and customer details. In conclusion, it is partially agreed that
math
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 is required to generate a profitable
business
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. In the past,
people
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 used to calculate figures manually—
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, the new technology overwhelmed the mathematical theories related to all the
business
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 transactions.
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