Some people think that zoos are cruel and all the zoos should be closed. However, others think that zoos are useful to protect rare animals. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

In the present age, whether zoological
parks
should be allowed to function is
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of controversy. Some people assert that these places are harmful
for
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the
animals
, whereas others believe that they provide a place for their protection. I think that some zoological
parks
are great if they provide the
appropiate
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appropriate
environment to keep them. There are several reasons why some part of
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society believe that zoos are cruel.
First
, many of these places
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use
animals
for the sake of entertainment and keep the creatures in closed spaces.
Therefore
, these surroundings do not offer them the freedom they need to live a natural
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and many
start
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getting sick.
In addition
to that, these living beings are not provided with the required nutrition that they normally find in their original surroundings,
therefore
, they get weaker physically and their life span shortens. To illustrate
further
one of these natural
parks
in my hometown was closed
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because the
animals
were in a detrimental condition due to an
innapropriate
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inappropriate
artificial environment and their poor health.
On the other hand
, some
parks
are found to provide good care for the living
species
adapting
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environment that simulates very closely their natural atmosphere,
consequently
, they can develop in a normal way. Another aspect
that is
important from some of these adapted settings is the fact that they provide protection for some endangered
species
, facilitating the correct breeding and reproduction
avoding
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avoiding
the extinction of them. To cite an example, there is
this
wildlife zoo in Australia founded by Steeve, who was widely known as “the crocodile hunter”,
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zoo holds a
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of
species
that were about to get
extincted
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extinct
, now they enjoy
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a spaced ecosystem where they feel at home are fed correctly and are well cared by professionals. To conclude,
adecuated
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adequate
parks
that are used to have
animals
to entertain the public can be
endagering
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endangering
engaging
for the
species
that are taken unnecessarily from their native
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • animal welfare
  • conservation
  • captive breeding
  • habitat
  • ethical issues
  • zoochosis
  • endangered species
  • genetic diversity
  • reintroduction programs
  • wildlife education
  • sanctuary
  • natural living conditions
  • artificial environments
  • behavioral enrichment
  • ecosystem
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