The use of cell phones (mobile phones) has increased rapidly in the twenty-first century. Additionally, cell phones can now be used for many purposes besides making phone calls. What are the advantages and disadvantages of cell phones?

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In
this
contemporary era, the advancement of technology kept increasing,
besides
, the masses need to keep up with it. All over the nation, the uses of
cell
phones
are tremendously increased not only for calling purposes but
also
, there are many other grounds including benefits apart from it.
This
essay will substantiate the advantages and disadvantages of mobile
phones
in the following paragraph with relevant examples. The mobile
phone
plays a vital role in individual
life
it becomes an essential part of human's
life
. There are numerous reasons that through advanced technology individuals come closer to
cell
phones
. Despite the fact, that technology has some drawback
especially
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with
cell
phone
users.
For example
, excessive uses of
phones
could cause more harm to human’s health like poor eyesight, mental stress, uneven sleep patterns because of the blue rase that coming through
the
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cell
phones
.
Furthermore
,
people
started living along they started loving their own company and make a distance from family members. When
people
got spare
time
instead
of going out hangout with friends, they started sitting in
room
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by snacking
social
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feeds, updates or by watching movies. On the one hand, it is not neglectable the fact that mobiles made human
life
much
more
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easier, quicker and smoother.
Firstly
, it helps us
with
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keep
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up with current trends. In
this
hustle and bustle
life
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people
would not have enough
time
to watch television or read newspapers but they use their
phones
oftentimes.
Nevertheless
, there
are
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some outstanding application that gives us enough information about day to day
life
like, news apps, health apps, or online newspaper, blogs, articles you name it., not only these apps help us to keep updated but
also
save our
time
as well as money to putting out for health classes or buying newspapers.
On the other hand
, every mobile
phone
have
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a unique feature
that is
google
time
it helps
people
to keep remember dates, meetings, important
appoinments
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appointments
and so on.
In addition
, it
also
saves
our
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huge money to spending on calling overseas. As we know in the past
people
used to send letters and those took many days, some times could be months to reach.
However
, now because
of
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phone
calls or video calls made our
life
much easier masses could see everything or take an update to their family members who are living in
foreign
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land by video calling. To conclude, considering above mentioned points, it is evident that,
people
carry a whole world in a small gadget in their pocket. In my opinion, the mobiles that we use have many merits as compare to demerits.
Hence
, the mobile is not only used for calling purposes but
also
has countless advantages.
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