Topic: It is better for college students to live far away from home than live at home with their parents. Do you agree or disagree?

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students

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the backbone of every nation. They can build a future country.

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, a large

amount

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of people believe that it is good for

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university

students

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are lived separately without parents compare to they are being lived with

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their father

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and mother at home. I completely agree with

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statement because the college pupils should stay alone with friends or separate room and

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trend would help

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their future.

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with, there are many reasons for

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positive trend.

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,

students

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have a chance to know about

outside

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world

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, they will become a good

knowledgeble

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knowledgeable

and skill person in their upcoming years.

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, they can get

experience

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the experience

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of how to manage and use

finacial

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financial

resources with their own life as a consequent, the

pubils

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pupils

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will never spend money on unwanted expenses because they are known about the value of money when they are handled cash.

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, the Western countries parents are allowed to their children live

separetely

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separately

when they are gotten an adult age.

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, an adult education person should live without their family and parents must encourage to do

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because the

students

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have to stand with their own leg. Most

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fathers and mothers are always pampered to their kids even they are gotten matured level

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, they can not survive without any balance

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means always needs another man hands

for

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hold

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.

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, the Asian part of countries never allowed to their babies stay lonely even they will be getting married

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,

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students

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never explore to out of the world because they have not

meet

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a

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opportunity to do. To conclude, there are many advantages where

students

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are lived alone but

disadavantages

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disadvantages

can not be ignored.

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, university

students

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will

be stay

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be staying

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at

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private

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room while they will manage their own expenses

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as

tution

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tuition

fee, rent,

accomdation

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accommodation

and etc. Because they

are being working

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are being worked

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while studying.

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they will not afraid about their future in order

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they can get job experience

also

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as a result

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this

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will assist for their tomorrow work career.