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Internet technology means people do not need to travel to foreign countries to understand how others live. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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the issue of whether nowadays
people
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 do not need to go other places because of the development of technology has been raising a lot of debates. Some might say that internet services have a beneficial effect on the life of
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 as they can know everything about the world by searching on Google so that they just stay at home and need not travel anywhere.
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, insist on the opinion that it is important to go to different countries because the reality experiences help the population understand foreign others' lives clearly. Viewing from a general perspective, I personally agree with the former opinion for the following reasons.
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 with, in modern life, the crowd expands their knowledge about the other culture of the other places by online devices.
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, they can save their time if they stay at home and investigate something on the internet.
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, for the person who wants to know how Singaporean live and what it looks like, we just text in Google and it gives you results including pictures and videos.
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, the money will be reduced and they can use it for necessary situations.
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, taking a trip costs so much money to pay for it and if
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 get
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 money for investing they can earn more than before.
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, their health can be protected if they do not travel because the Covid-19 diseases are outbreak and
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 is very dangerous for travelling at
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 time.
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, some
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 think that moving to other countries can substantially help them have opportunities to interact with native speakers or try local food or release their pressures,
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 under the complicate of virus corona, it is better if
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 stay at home and watch youtube for relaxing and broaden their horizon In conclusion, tourism contributes to the development of the economy of the nation.
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, in business life with the internet , the technology we can know all things which we want to with the simple gesture by Google or Youtube.

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