Many Teenagers now have their own smartphone. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this and give your own opinion

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With the development of science and technology, digitalization
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our life day by day. Every
teenagers
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have their individual smartphone. In
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essay, I will discuss my own view and
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both negative and positive effects on it. On the one hand,
smartphone
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the smartphone
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have
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many functions . It takes more
conventient
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for people's daily life .
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,Teenagers can take online courses through their smartphone .
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, if they lost their way or meet the criminal guys, they can call
police
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and their parents.
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,
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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