According to the “World Health Organization”, all international travel should end until the coronavirus has gone. Do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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this
day of the COVID-19
pandemic
, the World
Health
Organization claims that there must have a
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to every
countries
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of the outbound tourism. From my perspective, I completely agree with
this
solution of
disease
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disease-preventing

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preventing
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.
To begin
with, stopping
travel
would conduce to the safety of each person.
Firstly
, the risk of infection might considerably be reduced by the act of forcing
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due to the less face-to-face contact and the minor virus spread by transporting. There is no insurance that the foreign people are not infected by the viruses so it would lead to a great threat for people if the overseas
traveling
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were continuing.
Secondly
, it
also
involves
others
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security from coronavirus if one person does not obey the rules of
travel
forbiddance.
Hence
, the
disease
spread
need
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preventing by each resident as well as the whole society in order to assure
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public
health
.
Besides
, the governments’ change in tourism tends to spark off some advantages.The more
health
insurance of the citizens, the fewer burdens
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the authorities.
The national
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health
is viewed to be protected in the best term if the country produces laws to halt some or all international
travel
. According to many
researches
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types of research
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, the countries that stop outbound
travel
such
as Vietnam, North
Korean
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, might have
less
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infected cases in
this
pandemic
.
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,
besides
the
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essentially saving citizens from the dangerous
viruss
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virus
viruses

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, the successful result of banning international flights would
also
gain the other countries’ outlook in the
disease
time. Notwithstanding, it is crucial for governments to halt all the
oubound
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flights
in
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the onset of
pandemic
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but there
are
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a range of overseas residents or the cargo transport of essential medical, food and other supplies, which should not be stopped. All in all, there is no denying of forbidding outbound tourism in
this
day,
nevertheless
, it is not enough to prevent the
disease
. I believe it bases on each person to be solidary to stop
this
covid-19
pandemic
.
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