You eat at your college cafeteria every lunchtime. However, you think it needs some improvements. Write a letter to the college magazine. In your letter, explain what you like about the cafeteria Say what is wrong with it Suggest how it could be improved

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Dear sir, I am a regular visitor who

eat

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lunch at the college cafeteria purely on grounds that the

food

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foodservice

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service

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in it is hygienic and fresh, suitable priced and it has a friendly atmosphere. There are,

however

, a number of deficiencies which I believe should be put right.

To begin

with,

although

your staffs try to keep the tables clean, there are not enough employees at peak time to clear their tables themselves

then

they finished eating.

Moreover

, certain

students

do not bother to do

this

, there are

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numerous

students

who do not wait in the queue to be served, which is very annoying for the majority of us.

Last

but not

list

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, there is only one billing counter and

this

makes it extremely busy. As mention earlier, from my perspective, it would be a good idea providing that more signs were put around the cafeteria asking

students

put

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their plates and cutlery on the trolleys provided and throw

awaytheir

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away their

leftovers and rubbish.

In addition

, you

shoul

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should

tell

students

when they are being anti-social and jumping the queue.

Finally

, you should consider

add

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more billing

counter

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counters

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so that we

not be

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are not

were not

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late for our classes. I appreciate your time and attention to these matters.

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Yours

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Your

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Yours

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faithfully, Thu Loan Nguyen

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