You eat at your college cafeteria every lunchtime. However, you think it needs some improvements. Write a letter to the college magazine. In your letter, explain what you like about the cafeteria Say what is wrong with it Suggest how it could be improved

Dear sir, I am a regular visitor who
eat
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eats

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lunch at the college cafeteria purely on grounds that the
food
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foodservice

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service
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served

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in it is hygienic and fresh, suitable priced and it has a friendly atmosphere. There are,
however
, a number of deficiencies
which
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that

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I believe should be put right.
To begin
with,
although
your staffs try to keep the tables clean, there are not enough employees at peak time to clear their tables themselves
then
they finished eating.
Moreover
, certain
students
do not bother to do
this
, there are
a
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apply

The indefinite article a may not be required with the plural noun students in this sentence. Consider removing the article, or changing the noun to singular.

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numerous
students
who do not wait in the queue to be served, which is very annoying for the majority of us.
Last
but not
list
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least

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, there is only one billing counter and
this
makes it extremely busy. As mention earlier, from my perspective, it would be a good idea providing that more signs were put around the cafeteria asking
students
put
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to put

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their plates and cutlery on the trolleys provided and throw
awaytheir
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away their

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leftovers and rubbish.
In addition
, you
shoul
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should

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tell
students
when they are being anti-social and jumping the queue.
Finally
, you should consider
add
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adding

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more billing counter so that we
not be
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are not
were not

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late for our classes. I appreciate your time and attention to these matters.
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Yours

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Your
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Yours

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faithfully, Thu Loan Nguyen

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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