Some people say that now we can see films on our phones or tablets. there is no need to go to the cinema. Other say that to be fully enjoyed, films need to be seen in a cinema. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

There are a number of resources and techniques available for entertainment that can be affordable for anyone in society. Among these, a growing number of
people
are using electronic devices are more efficient than enjoying
time
by visiting film halls.
This
essay will discuss, why smart devices were selected by a majority of the
people
rather than
cinema
. In good old times, everyone had
time
to watch
movies
on the big screen at
cinema
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the cinema

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with a family member or with friends.
This
was in fact a tradition carried out mostly by wealthy
people
.
However
, the cost of tickets to
cinema
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has become cheaper with
time
and most
people
choose
this
as a weekend getaway program.
On the other hand
side, the quality of the sounds and the pictures is always been the highlight of
cinema
halls. As an example, the options are available to watch the films in 3D with personal headsets. But
on the contrary
, the prices are not affordable to watch the films regularly at the
cinema
.
On the other hand
, side increasing count of the audience, are now attracted to stream
movies
online and watch them on phones or even smart television at home with loved ones. The main reason behind
this
is that the film producers and other internet hosts upload even the new released
movies
to the website which will most of the
time
be streamed for free or with a little cost.
Therefore
, fans can enjoy these films without wasting
time
travel and it is very cost-effective that anyone who has access to the internet with a smartphone can watch
movies
. As an example, there are uncountable websites and torrents which will allow access to movie database and it can be watched even when travelling. In conclusion, there are
people
who believe that watching a movie at
cinema
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is the best way to appreciate its high-quality sound and pictures and another hand side there are many who use smart devices to enjoy
movies
due to the fact that it is very affordable and
time consuming
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. I strongly believe enjoying
movies
online is the best option compared to save money and
time
.

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