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In many countries, schoolchildren are required to wear school uniforms. Do you think this should be enforced in all schools? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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In many countries, pupils are required to wear uniforms when attending
school
, and
this
 is something that should be enforced for the following reasons. Primarily, students, especially those in their
teenagers
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 years, are under pressure both academically and socially; insisting on a standardised
uniform
 within the
school
 alleviates some of
this
 as it means that the
student
 does not have to worry about whether their peers think that they are dressed well or in the latest fashions.
This
 has the added advantage for those from
lower income
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 families who may simply not be able to afford the clothes worn by those from more affluent families. Not only does it remove the social pressure, but wearing a
school
uniform
also
 has a psychological advantage, as the
student
 is dressed in the mode of attire used for
study
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. Much like wearing a suit and tie may signal
going
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 to work for many people, wearing a
school
uniform
 prepares the child for the day of learning.
However
,
this
 perhaps works best for younger students. By age 16 or 17, it may be appropriate for the
student
 to wear more casual clothing when they reach their later teens, as the idea of ‘conforming’ by wearing a
uniform
 could discourage the
student
 from pursuing
further
 education and
this
 is often the time in which young adults are looking to establish their own clear identity. It is at
this
 point that it may be more productive to allow more relaxed clothing
such
 as jeans. In conclusion,
although
 a
school
uniform
 does have advantages at certain stages of a
student
’s academic career, there is
also
 a time when the enforcement of a standardised set of clothing may be counterproductive.
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