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Online communication is becoming more popular than face-to-face communication in many companies. Do the advantages of this outweigh its disadvantages?

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In recent days, technology has a boon. Online discussion is becoming more famous than face-to-face talking in many organisations.
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 trend has both merits and demerits. The question that arises is whether there are more positive or negative aspects associated with it? I believe the former outshines the latter. The most significant benefit is online meeting is becoming more famous is that it is
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 process.To explain more, nowadays most of the companies prefer meeting online's due to the fact of fast processing. To illustration, every person uploads their resume online and it is quite difficult to conduct all the interview's within a day. So, higher authorities always prefer to conduct the interview virtually. With the help of ,
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 it is very easy to conduct meetings and interview's online.
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 considerable advantages are that people do not need to commute and waste
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money from one place to another. It means the employee has the option to stay home with their family.
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 everyone is doing a fight with covid-19. Government announce 20 days lockdown to break the disaster illness chain. So everyone lives in their own house and doing work from home. Companies using software for online discussion with their employees. Even though the merits outweigh, there is a demerit that cannot be ignored
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 as, the face-to-face discussion always
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 to interact with the person which is not possible in virtual communication. That being said, the advantages brought forth by online communication is becoming more popular in terms of time-saving and feel comfortable
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 the employee are truly encouraging and can definitely overshadow its disadvantages.
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