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Some people think it is not necessary for adults to receive education in class. Self-study is a good way for them to study more effectively. To what extent do you agree or disagree with it?

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Nowadays, society argues that studying outside of the class by themselves is a more productive manner of being educated for the middle-aged community. I personally believe that the importance of studying in class is very incremental if
adults
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 follow a structured
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 program.
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, many
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 neglect to organize their agenda to be successful in their studies, so that they turn to organizations that offer them a detailed curriculum.
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, if
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 spare some time on researching the content and consulting with experienced graduates, they can professionally create a chart addressing their abilities and availability. In
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 manner, they can work on their problems by themselves, as they are the only one who is aware of their insufficiencies.
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 who prepare for their qualification exams as a requirement of their job description, tend to be more successful when they take a
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 phase on the preparation period and organize a detailed syllabus typical for them. society can be even more effective when they find a study-mate for self-preparation.
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, the
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 preparation period is more flexible and budget-friendly for
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. Since they don’t need to follow a schedule other
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 produced for them, they can easily make changes in their timetable as long as it doesn’t lead to procrastination.
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, to increase the responsibility and motivation
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 can ask an experienced friend to be a mentor and guide them during their journey. Above all, they can spend money on needed books or online courses,
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 of being charged fortunes by tutors. To sum up, I concur that
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 is an effective way of learning, if proper measurements are made
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 because in
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 way
people
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 are more likely to have a flexible schedule to address their own needs.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • self-directed learning
  • lifelong learning
  • online platforms
  • blended learning
  • digital literacy
  • peer support
  • curriculum
  • autodidact
  • interactive learning
  • time management
  • educational credentials
  • instructional materials
  • virtual classroom
  • personalized learning
  • formal education
  • learning autonomy
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