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Although more and more people read news on the Internet, newspapers will remain the most important source of news. Agree or Disagree?

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The recent years, we have seen many the breakthrough in the technology,
easpecially
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especially
 Internet.Thanks to it, we can get
information
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 easily and quickly.I agree with the idea that the
newspaper
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 is not as popular as it used to be for
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 following reasons.
Firstly
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online
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newspaper
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 is more convenient than
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newspaper
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.With
Internet
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, you can get
information
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 easily.Buying a
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 is no longer convenient . Unlike in the 1960s , we
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can't
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roadside
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.
Instaed
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Instead
 of it, people can surf the Internet to know more news.
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,
newspaper
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canot
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can't
cannot
 keep up with
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 quickly.
Everyday
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,
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newspaper
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the newspaper
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 is only published in
early
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the early
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 morning, and its content mainly
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about
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some
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 from yesterday. While
online
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newspaper
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 is up-dated hour-by-hour.Whenever
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 there is some hot news will be posted online right now.
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, the
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 is only used once .
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 and every hour , everything changes a lot so all
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 bought will have no value anymore.
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Therefore
 , people will waste their money on it . To sum up, reading
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newspaper
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 is a traditional beauty.
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, the online
newspaper
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 is much more suitable for modern life than it.
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • reliable
  • credible
  • focused
  • immersive
  • tangibility
  • tradition
  • access
  • digital devices
  • demographics
  • older generation
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